Genre: Indie Drama
Premise: This coming-of-age tale follows six lives in modern day New York, highlighted by a 20-something aspiring novelist who accidentally adopts a 6 year old African American child.
About: Made the 2007 Black List with 3 votes, though I suspect it would've been much higher had more people read it. Radnor plays Ted Mosby on the sometimes hilarious sometimes average "How I Met Your Mother." With a cast of highly talented multi-taskers (Neil Patrick Harris is hosting the Emmys. Jason Seagal wrote and starred in Forgetting Sarah Marshall), Radnor obviously had to do something big to stand out. Writing, directing and starring in his own movie was the only way he could trump his castmates. Malin Ackerman and Kate Mara will co-star.
Writer: Josh Radnor
Wow. I cannot stress how shocked I was when I finished this script, dug around, and found out that Ted Mosby wrote it. I was so convinced that there were two Josh Radnor's, a writer and an actor, that I kept surfing the internet for half an hour convinced that there had to be a mix-up or some bad information. I'm still not entirely sure, as IMDB doesn't even list the movie. It's not that I don't think someone from a sitcom can be that talented in another trade but...Actually, yes, that is what I think. Writing takes time. Getting good enough to compete with the awesome pool of talent at this level takes dedication. To write one of the top 15 scripts of the year, out of a sea of 50,000...you have to be dedicated to your craft. That Radnor belted this out in between spit takes with the flute girl from American Pie has my head spinning.
Obviously there's some untapped pool of talent in goofy affable sitcom leads. Following the Zach Braff model, Radnor wrote his script and got a hot female star attached (Ackerman). Then he got funding with him attached as both actor and star. The big difference between Braff and Radnor though - who could easily pass as brothers - is that Radnor can really write. While Braff did a great job on the acting and directing front in Garden State, the script itself wandered too much. I am so convinced of Radnor's talents after reading this that I'm willing to bet he was a writer long before he was an actor. There's too much confidence in his unique snapshot of New York City. From the characters to the stories to the dialogue (which came off just as electric as it did realistic) , we've been introduced to a story not quite like any other in a city that's been around for 300 years.
In the spirit of full disclosure, it should be noted that I'm a sucker for coming-of-age films. I've said it before and I'll say it again. But I'm also the first to admit that there's nothing worse than a coming-of-age film gone bad. Characters are complaining about their troubled suburban childhoods. Mommy and Daddy don't love me. What do I do with my life? When the amount of whine starts competing with Napa Valley, these screenplays can be like a bad night out at the Roxy. But while Radnor laments, he never dwells. His story moves at a brisk pace for a character piece. He knows when to chug along, when to slow down, and when to check in on the other characters.
Sam is in his late 20s, living in New York, rolling through girls like Big Macs, trying to become a novelist but not really caring if he succeeds or not. Although Sam won't admit it to himself, he's lonely. And his inability to come to terms with that is what drives his actions. Sam's best friend is the beautiful Annie. Annie has a condition called Alopecia Universales, which doesn't allow her to grow hair on her body. I know, I know. This has cringe-inducing written all over it but I'm telling you, Radnor knows what he's doing. There are a few times when Annie breaks down about her condition, but the condition is more symbolic if anything. Annie feels just like a lot of people - inadequate, not good enough. But she maintains a positive spirit through it all, and is one of the most *real* characters I've read in a long time.
Rounding out the group of friends are the fiery Mary-Catherine and Charlie, two New Yorkers who fight just as much as they get along. Charlie has been offered the job of a lifetime in LA but Mary-Catherine would rather cook her face in a microwave than move to that soulless concrete wasteland. Even though the two are probably the most "normal" characters in the bunch, the exploration of their problems is so universal that their story is just as compelling as the others.
So on his way to his first book deal, Sam observes a small black child amongst his mother, brothers and sisters on the subway. When the family leaves though, the boy, Rasheen, deliberately stays behind. Sam, feeling like he should do something, tries to take the kid to the police but Rasheen refuses to go (later we find out he's been in a number of foster homes and has been repeatedly abused). So Sam (naturally) takes Rasheen to his book deal meeting, and (naturally) the publishing people are a little confused as to why their new author is escorting around a small black child. Each time Sam tries to get rid of Rasheen, something comes up that prevents him from doing so, and before he knows it, he really starts to like the kid. So hours turn into more hours. More hours turn into days. Without even realizing it, Sam has unofficially adopted Rasheen. Which is just crazy. But I'm telling you. Radnor makes it believable.
Complicating matters is that Sam also meets the stunningly beautiful Mississippi, an aspiring singer who's trying to pick up the pieces of her life. When she won't buy into Sam's one-night stand proposal, in order to get her to have sex with him, he proposes a "three-night stand." The keys to his apartment, come in and out at any time, and they'll be a couple for three days. The idea is so absurd and Sam is so charming, she goes along with it. Of course after the alcohol's worn off the next morning, Sam can't believe what he's done. And when Mississippi finds out that Rasheen is living with him, all hell breaks loose. When she hears of the abuse though, she softens a little. And all of a sudden Sam has gone from single man on the street, to having his own quasi-family.
"More please" perfectly captures the feeling of people living cramped together in this absurd but wonderful city, bumping into and bouncing off of each other - affecting each other's lives in ways they don't even know. The theme of "growing up" is present on every page and it's something I, and I imagine a lot of you, identify with. As artists, we grow up with the rest of the world looking down on us and thinking we're crazy for not, in their minds, "growing up." And I think Radnor paints a fair balanced assessment of this phenomenon.
The only question mark with the film is, should Josh Radnor play the lead? His default happy-go-lucky smirk doesn't exactly lend itself to Sam's harsh and sometimes abrasive behavior. Sam's got weight. You need an actor who can express that. Of course, none of us have seen Radnor's acting outside of yukking it up with Robin Chibotski, so who knows? He could very well be the next Dustin Hoffman. But in a project that's so strong on so many levels, Mr. Mosby better know what he's doing, because if done right, this has the potential to be today's Graduate. "Happy Thank You More Please" breaks into my Top 25.
Link: Happy Thank You More Please
[ ] What the hell did I just read?
[ ] barely kept my interest
[ ] worth the read
[x] impressive
[ ] genius
What I learned: Parentheticals. The literary world has become more forgiving of parantehticals. Some people hate them but I love them. When you have a guy saying to a girl, "You look hot tonight," having the girl's response be "Thanks, I guess," changes quite a bit when you add the parenthetical "(not uncharmed)" right before it. With sarcasm and irony and people constantly saying one thing but meaning another, the parenthetical can ease a lot of the confusion.




You got the casting wrong. Kate Mara is playing Mississippi, Ackerman's playing Annie.
Oops, I was afraid of that.
Yay. I'm so glad you decided to review this. I was actually about to email you what I thought of the script (ha)... yes, thoroughly enjoyable. And although the way in which the story is propelled in the beginning feels forced, I was so glad I took this script ride. Definitely looking forward to catching it in theaters. Cheers. -romcomland
You know I totally took a chance. I had 80 scripts I wanted to read and I kept seeing that title and thought, "hmmm, I kinda like that title." You and one other person requesting it put me over the edge. Did you know Radnor wrote it? Is that why you requested it?
Hey Carson,
Short answer: yes. Longish answer: I was interested for several reasons - the black list nod, the title, and what Radnor (aka Ted Mosby) possibly had up his sleeve. -romcomland
Delightful indeed.
DL link isn't working. Gets to the filepage but no file is there?
Shit, no it is there now.
(trying to suppress his eagerness to read this) Well if Carson thinks it's ok, I suppose I'll give it a look...
Hey Carson,
Have you ever read Devon Gummersall's ROCK, SCISSORS, PAPER (at least that's the title it was rocking when I read it)? Gummersall played the lovable nerd Brian on My So-Called Life. He must have written it just as that beloved series was wrapping up, so it's probably circa '95 or '96.
Terrific coming of age story with memorable characters, piercingly truthful dialogue and dramatic, kinetically charged situations. The kid could flat out write. I've never heard about it since, and have always wondered what became of this beautifully written script. Any chance you can track it down, assuming you don't already have it?
Hmm, interesting. Well, if it's from 96, way before they started going straight to PDF, and before obscure non-sold scripts still got notoriety (via the Black List), it's probably almost impossible to find unless Devon himself sends it to me (Devon?) This could be an interesting topic: TV stars who wrote good scripts. Or did we just cover them all. :)
Danny Strong's Recount. Number one on the blacklist two years back. Although he's more of a TV bit player than a TV star.
Great website, Carson!
I wanted to ask if anybody has a screenplay based on "BioShock" video game, written by John Logan. Could you send it to me? The adress is lembit.saar@hotmail.com. Thank you in advance!
Lembit (Estonia, Europe)
I'm a reader and I passed on this script: well-written, but bland and forgettable.The message: love and happiness are good. The little boy is a fantasy kid with no behavioral problems -- who wouldn't want to hang on to him? The other characters' problems are mild and the happy endings come too easily.
Carson, unlike yourself I'm not too fond of the whole "coming-of-age" genre. I generally find that such movies tend to be a little too self-indulgent and manufactured. This one is no exception. The whole alopecia issue, NY v. LA, and the small child seem a little too contrived. Especially Rasheen. As someone commented, the kid seems like little more than a one-dimensional prop better suited to 70's and 80's sitcoms like "Different Strokes" and "Webster". Just out of curiosity what was your take on Garden State and Little Miss Sunshine? I didn't like either one.
If Malin Ackerman is playing the part it is no longer a potential award winner.
Your website rocks, Carson. Are you planning to put up any thriller scripts this week?
As much as I liked this script, I can see how some people wouldn't dig it. So no hard feelings on the disagreements.
Anon, let's see. I have a comedy for tomorrow. And a sci-fi thriller for Thursday. No idea what Friday's script will be yet.
Glib and trite.
Not half the script that Garden State was.
Very preictable -- ooo, he finallh hears her sing! What a twist.
And by the way --- where's Rasheen?
The most significant character in the movie gets thrown away like a gum wrapper.
What a waste
Okay Carson everytime I post a comment it disappears and can't post anything but under Anonymous. I love your site, loved this script but man if you're not getting feedback that's the reason.
Looks like you're getting plenty of feedback but wanted to explain why I loved the ending and I lost the entire thing. Sucks. The posting comments, not the ending. Can't have a Hollywood ending with a New York script. Of course the kid would go back to foster care, but the entire story revolved around giving him a chance to see how life could be. Like all of them had to see. Loved this one, it'd be in my top 25 too. Good choice, Carson. Hope to hell I can learn how to post comments.
"coming-of-age tale follows six lives in modern day New York, highlighted by a 20-something aspiring novelist who accidentally adopts a 6 year old African American child."
Barf. Just barf.
The script seems to be missing pages 5 and 6. He and the boy seem to teleport from the subway to in front of a police station. Or is the teleporting part of the script? Fine, don't ruin it for me.
I wish I had a comment magic wand. I really do. Another thing you can do is sign up for blogger as just a viewer, not a blogger, and that should allow you to post comments under an official I.D.
To those that hated it, I respect all your opinions. It's definitely the kind of subject matter that some people can't stand. Keep'em coming. The good and the bad.
Yeah, there seems to be a page number issue though I don't think any of the screenplay is missing.
They move from the subway train on page 4 to in front of a police station on page 7.
Keep in mind, I'm not complaining, I got the thing for free. I'm just commenting in case anyone else gets confused like I did. And isn't smart enough to figure it out right away like I was.
Hmmm... my comment got lost too.
I'm not a fan of writers writing about being writers, and this reads like a Radnor wank-fest. It's kind of like HIMYM if Ted was surrounded by more Teds...
That said, keep up the great site Carson... I really appreciate it.
Also - can't see the comment box with Safari.
-sent via Firefox
Definitely missing pages in that jump to the police station at the beginning...
Also missing pages at the end when Sam runs from apartment and then we're already in the middle of Alabama (oops -- I mean mississsipi's) song...
Yeah, pages 5 and 6 and 115 and 116 are definitely missing. Oh, well. I enjoyed the script.
Really enjoying it except that it's missing pages 5 and 6
People, what do YOU THINK happens on 5 & 6...? How f*8king obvious is it that he's concerned about the kid, takes him to the police station to 'do the right thing', etc.?
What I would like to know is whether they intend to self-finance this. It's not listed at all anywhere, which means it's unlikely that it comes together any other way.
re the script itself... eh. Good writing, but 5 bucks says it won't play when shot.
This project's already shot... Announced in Variety today.
Is it really missing those pages or is it just a page misprint? I don't see the illogical jump that everybody else is seeing.
I thought this was pretty strong till about 3/4 of the way through, when I realised that the ending would be trite and predictable, far too neat to have any real resonance. Which is a shame, because I did enjoy reading the earlier parts.
That said, I HATED that Radnor employed the use of the "magical Negro" trope, whether it was intentional or not (well, it probably wasn't). Rasheed, with his "thousand year old eyes" full of wisdom, is one-dimensional and sadly only exists to facilitate Sam's emotional growth-- he doesn't feel like a real person, nor does he turn into one by the end. Instead, he's the perfect child: apparently wise beyond his years, has a tragic history but is a genius artist, despite being only a child.
And of course, off-screen, another "magical" minority, the Indian cab driver Annie mentions, exists in order to give her some life-altering advice-- to express gratitude for what life gives you. And it's only once she embraces this advice that she can "truly" live life.
Overall, it's enjoyable-- and funny/cute in some parts-- but it isn't quite as resonant as the writer wanted it to be.
I love to see this movies and I long to see Malin doing a real person like Annie! Malin is the right fit for this role! OMG, going to be amazing!
I have lives with Alopecia Universalis since I was 7-yrs-old.
Thank you for writing about this script.
And I just love Malin---I think she IS award-worthy. I can't wait to see this film.
I am thrilled to see a character with Alopecia Univeralis. I am a healthy woman who has suffered from this fairly unknown condition for about 8 years. I am interested to see how she portrays the devastating experience of losing ones hair.
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