Genre: Drama-Thriller
Premise: A man wakes up in a coffin with no idea how he got there.
About: Ryan Reynolds just signed onto this last week. Spanish director Rodrigo Cortes will take the reigns for Chris Sparling's script. Spain-based Versus Entertainment will finance the film.
Writer: Chris Sparling
I loooooooooved this script. I loved it for so many reasons I can't count them. First of all, I am always on the lookout for a smart cheap movie idea, something that can be shot with minimal hands, minimal equipment, and minimal funds. You know, a way for you to actually *make* a movie without having to go through that sludge-pit known as the Hollywood "system." I tell anyone who will listen: If you can shoot the movie yourself, do it, because you'll achieve what 98% of screenwriters never will - having a finished film. But don't be fooled into thinking this is easy. I don't care who says anybody can make a film with a camera and a Mac. If you want your movie to look professional, you're going to need somebody who knows how to light, somebody who knows how to shoot, somebody who knows how to dress a set. You're still going to need things that cost money. Therefore, you're extremely limited in the scope of your film. It's why a lot of low-budget films take place in one location. Keeps things cheap.
So when I heard of a script where the whole thing took place in a coffin?? I flipped. Like flipped out in anger. Why didn't I think of that?? The cheapest movie set EV-ER. But wait. How do you write an entire story that takes place in a coffin? Let's ask Chris Sparling.
Paul, an American truck driver in Iraq, has just woken up in a coffin. It's burning up. Hot as balls. Lack of oxygen makes it hard to breathe. And let's not forget the coffin, which only allows him a few inches of room in every direction. I will offer this warning right now: If you are claustrophobic, do not read this script.
At first Paul has no memory of how he got here. But things start slowly coming back to him. He was driving a truck, delivering food, when there was a loud explosion. Many of his co-workers were killed but somehow he wasn't. He remembers Iraqis coming towards him. But after that? Nothing. Now he's down here, in a grave, in Iraq. Yes, Sparling wrote an international thriller with a 75,000 dollar price tag. (well, maybe 2 million after Reynolds is paid). Can you say genius?
Paul feels a buzz. A buzz! It's a phone! He has a phone! He checks it. It's not his. It's got 1 bar of flashing reception and 2 bars of battery left. This phone is his only chance at survival. When it runs out, so does he. He starts frantically calling people. First Emergency. He hurriedly explains his situation but the operator is suspicious. Why is a man buried in a coffin, supposedly in Iraq, calling an Ohio emergency line? The woman is worthless. He hangs up and calls home. But all he gets is the answering machine. He leaves a desperate message but who knows if his phone will even work by the time his wife gets home.
Then Paul receives a call. A man, Jabir, tells him that unless Paul can come up with 5 million dollars by 9:00pm (it's 7:00), he will be left in his coffin to die. Paul, who already had anxiety issues *before* he ended up in a coffin, nearly shits his pants. He gets back on the phone, trying to get to the FBI, but in a well-disguised commentary on the state of our society, no one gives a shit. They forward him to other people, give him other numbers to call. If you've ever had to call Time Warner with an internet problem, Paul's situation might be familiar to you. He finally contacts a man in Iraq, Dan, whose job it is to deal with these "situations". Dan tells Paul that this is common practice for poor Iraqis. They kidnap and bury Americans, then ask for a ransom. If the money isn't paid, they leave them to die. Since the U.S. doesn't negotiate with terrorists, you can understand how precarious Paul's situation is. But Dan says he's going to find Paul. "How many of us have you found?" Paul asks. Dan doesn't answer.
The signal keeps flashing in and out, cutting off his calls prematurely, making everything even more frustrating. The battery bar goes down to one. Every call wastes precious battery juice. And as he waits, there's a nearby bombing, which shakes the ground, cracks the top of the coffin, and allows sand to start pouring in, slowly filling up the coffin. All the while, Paul begins to wonder if Dan is really trying to save him, or trying to keep him from turning this into an international incident, which could scar the U.S.'s already tainted reputation. Is Dan trying to keep Paul quiet until he dies?
This is top-notch storytelling here. Sparling really does a bang-up job creating tension. There are so many ticking time bombs: the battery, the signal, the air supply, the ransom, the sand, will Dan's people find him in time? It's all ticking down and you really feel this guy drowning - running out of options. My only fear film is whether an audience can handle being in a coffin for 80 minutes. I guess we'll find out. But it won't affect how solid this script is. A great read.
[ ] trash
[ ] barely kept my interest
[ ] worth the read
[x] impressive
[ ] genius
Script Link: Buried
What I learned: One location movies should be kept SHORT. I would highly recommend they not be over 95 pages. "Buried" understood this rule and was only 80 pages long. Audiences get a little jumpy if they're in one place for too long (blame Michael Bay). So keep the story slim.



Script link goes to Only Living Boy in NY.
Grrr. Why does this keep happening??
Unless NYC is a huge, metaphorical grave.
Screenplays are getting shorter everyday aren't they? This one runs only about eighty pages. I've always been told to be skeptical of scripts that are way this short regardless of premise.
I'll still read this though.
Interesting. Makes me want to read it but like you I now understand the meaning of a huge "to read" stack. Maybe some day. 80 pages I could probably get through quick.
F**kin amazing!!! I was losing my breath just reading it!
So good. It really does make you feel like you're in there.
So Carson, I gotta ask, what happened to the review of April's script No Exit?
It was a technical shooting script. Not the kind that was supposed to be read.
*Spoiler comment*
Why does "indie story" always mean "depressing ending"? :(
A good tight script though.
I bet you they shoot it both ways.
Page 12 : "I’m buried in the
middle of the fucking dessert!"
Ah that's the twist, is it? Turns out he was inside a large cheesecake the whole time.
Page 11 : "I must of got
hit in the head"
WOW. How much did this sell for then?
Only the Spanish company knows for sure, but probably very little, since it was such an independent project. I don't think they ever expected to land an actor as big as Reynolds.
Sounds wicked cool -- thanks for the tip and the link~~
Geez, that was ridiculously intense. Very, very impressive. Only thing I didn't like was the ending. But wow, what a great read.
I saw this last week on a repeat of that Tarantino directed episode of CSI or was it Quincy, M.E. or maybe Gunsmoke? I can't read it. I know there are no original ideas but when someone stretches out this old chestnut to a feature it's getting ridiculous.
It was packaged by UTA who reps writer, director and actor. UTA has been script shopping for the last few months for a drama for Reynolds. I wonder if the deciding factor on this one for Reynolds was that he gets to summer in Barcelona?
Great script! But I'm interested if the camera will be the whole time in the coffin or will they switch to the persons which are talking to Paul?
This was a fantastic screenplay. I was literally gasping for air an some points while reading it.
The only problem I had was with some of the writer's terrible description lines. He would explain stuff like a novel. For example Paul fishing through his pocket for the "safe number". How would anyone know he was looking for that? I mean on screen it will probably just be Ryan Reynolds frantically searching his pockets, so just say that. There were some other examples too, but I don't recall at the moment. He would reveal stuff before it was actually shown or explained. I hate that in sreenplays.
Ending was EXTREMELY LAME. I'm asumming the whole cheating on his wife was supposed to validate him croaking, but eh. Not buying it.
But the execution of this script was damn near perfect. Very tense.
I don't think he was cheating on his wife. He was knocking on death's door, why lie?
I really loved this script. Which is impressive cause I didn't think the film literally took place inside the coffin. I figured there'd be flashbacks or something. Really really good.
My heart was pounding at the end when Dan was telling Paul he found him. What a bastard for leading Paul on like that.
Hi Carson,
ARGH. Your site just ate my comment! Trying again...
I love your site - it's a great resource.
However, I've come to realize we may have opposite tastes. My kind of script is "Out of Sight," "Almost Famous," "High Fidelity." And yours is... "Buried"...?
I couldn't get into "Buried." Besides the laborious scene descriptions (ie. lack of white space; tons of non-visual clues), the dialogue was clunky.
Also, I have a problem with this description of Ryan's character:
"Getting a good look at him for the first time, we see that Paul is somewhere around 43 years old. Unshaven and physically unremarkable, he embodies the blue-collar American everyman."
Please, please tell me where guys who look like Ryan Reynolds and have his comedic timing are considered physically unremarkable and an everyman. As Tina Fey's daughter says: I want to go there.
Isn't "Buried" kinda like "The Hangover?" -- in the respect of ending up somewhere and not remembering how you got there is getting played out. Isn't there also yet another movie in pre-prod/prod where a groom can't remember what happened the night before his wedding and blah blah blah.....? Amnesia is such an easy way out hook. Like any movie centered around/featuring a wedding as part of the plot.
Man that read fast.
I liked it. Then again I am one of those guys who love it when the bad guys win.
Good stuff.
*SPOILER*
The company calling him while he was in a coffin to tell him he had been fired cracked me up.
-Jim
Very intense, impressive read. BUT...the ending sucks serious ass. I suspect that'll undergo a MAJOR rewrite...or ADDITION? Too short...perhaps he ran out of gas at page 79??
In response to the HANGOVER... "Buried" is not about the amnesia. That isn't even a big aspect of it. It's more about him trying to get out of the coffin... find someone to help him get out. It's certainly not like The Hangover, in any shape, way, or form.
It is rather intense. I have a feeling that this began as nothing more than a writing sample.
The future for this script:
-Massive rewrite, beefing up to 110 pages.
-He gets out of the coffin near mid-point. The new second half will involve him on the run.
Yes, what you said, wFav. I'd like to read the massive rewrite and the second half with the guy on the run.
And I don't think Anon meant "The Hangover" and/or buried was about "Amnesia," more about the tracing of steps and unraveling what happened to make sense of the present.
To the Anon who said Ryan Reynolds doesn't look like Paul is described in the script....The script was written for Ryan Reynolds. They didn't have a star yet. They'll probably just change his age and bam! He fits the part.
And Paul should not get out of the coffin. That defeats the purpose and would be way to hard to transition from 45 minutes of him in a coffin to the last 4 minutes of him out of the coffin. Not to mention there would be logical explanation for him to get out. If he's rescued, why would he be on the run? The script is fine the way it is. Changing anything about it would turn it into a totally different movie.
oops, I mean "wasn't" written for Ryan Reynolds.
For sure, obviously it wasn't written for him. I just found it amusing, since obviously the writer had someone else in mind (Paul Giamatti?? Thomas Haden Church?? I've got it, "Sideways, II: The Coffin"), but in Hollywood, the everyman is, apparently, the moderate adonis that is RR.
--Annie
SPOILER
I kinda liked the ending. So he dies? So what. heh heh. Even though they telegraphed it way too easily 10 pages from the moment. The guys were too overly eager. "We're almost there!" I knew they weren't going to find him. But that sand falling. Running out of time in every sense of the word.
*Spoiler comments*
I'm ok for the guy dying but maybe they could put in (ugh, I hate to say it) a twist? Maybe the coffin opens but, instead of the rescuer it's actually the kidnapper - who aims gun into coffin and...fade to black?
(Wow - maybe that's why I'm not a writer...sorry - I'll save my rewrite suggestions when I put on my "producers hat" for the Friday script challenge! :) )
Spoilers
Yeah, I knew he was going to die when he and Brenner were talking, but I thought it was a big punch to the gut when Brenner said they were led to Mark White. What a sad way to die. Your family will get nothing after your death, you cut off your thumb for no reason (but that's the least of his problems), you're last chance of survival may have been trying to do good, but ultimately lied and gave you false hope. I thought the ending was perfect and very powerful. I don't know why a lot of people didn't like it.
Agreed, it needed to be a short script and it maintains tension to the end, but it will be tricky to film. See the extras on the DVD of WORLD TRADE CENTER. The set for the buried alive bits was complex, and stressful for the actors.
The message seems to be, "When the chips are down, the only one you can count on is Uncle Sam, and he ain't none too reliable," which is hardly a money-making concept. Good luck to the producers.
If the director manages to film it all on one set without flashbacks, or intercuts to people at the other end of the phone line, and still hold our interest to the end, he deserves an Oscar, as does Ryan Reynolds.
How bout that for a job? Lay in a coffin 12 hours a day for 10 days.
Actually, I'm really curious about the shooting schedule for this one. They could conceivably shoot 15 pages a day and have this thing over with in a week. That might be why Reynolds signed on. A week of his time? So what.
Who's got the balls to direct this????
Haven't you read it? "Spanish director Rodrigo Cortes will take the reigns for Chris Sparling's script." ;-)
"How bout that for a job? Lay in a coffin 12 hours a day for 10 days."
...and then he goes home to Scarlett...
I feel like there's a joke there somewhere. But I can't think of it.
Wow. That was intense. Like mindbogglingly intense. I'm having a hard time breathing here right now. I raced through this script faster than any other I've ever read. It probably took me about 35-40 minutes. That's a very quick read.
My only problem with this is that audiences will get very uncomfortable watching this. I don't have too much of a problem with claustrophobia, but I can definitely see myself getting one after watching this.
Also, there were some definite issues in writing at times, though nothing major. The script was exciting enough and held my interest so well that I really don't care too much about its foibles. When a script is so good that even tiny, but glaring issues don't matter, you know you've hit the jackpot.
This movie is going to be seriously cheap to make.
Amazing script!! I saw the first movie of the director at the Montpellier festival a year ago, it was an unbelievable...economic thriller!! An impressive picture. Loved it. I think Cortes is a great choice for directing this, he's crazy enough! Just can't wait!!!
-René
Awesome! You don't read it, you eat it! I totally agree with martinb when whe says "If the director manages to film it all on one set without flashbacks, or intercuts to people at the other end of the phone line, and still hold our interest to the end, he deserves an Oscar, as does Ryan Reynolds." I don't think an American company would dare shooting this script the way it's written, let's see the Spaniards.
"Paul becomes angry, again sensing that more emphasis is being placed on containing the situation than rescuing him."
The script is full of lines like this. Isn't this "bad" writing?
No. Actually, this is becoming more and more common in screenplays. Giving us a momentary glimpse into the character's head clears things up that may be extremely difficult to show otherwise. Scripts are moving more and more towards an "individual reading experience," being enjoyable on their own. And while there are still some hardliners who will bash you for lines like this, as long as you don't abuse it, it's relatively accepted.
But how hard would it be to simply write, for example... description: "Paul looks angry." then dialogue: "PAUL: Those fuckers don't care about rescuing me, they just want to contain the situation. OK, it ain't Paddy Chayefsky, but telling and not showing really bugs me, and if the writer does it, I feel it's due to lack of talent and/or sheer laziness. If more and more scripts are doing this, then I guess that's the way of the world, but then my question would be, at what point is a writer abusing this technique? I haven't read BURIED, so it's a general question, it would really take me out of the story if the writer did it habitually.
I don't agree with you. I feel "dialoguing" it would be the real mistake. The writer explains the inner feelings of the character, which will be very useful for the director and the actor so they understand where the character is and show with a measured performance reactions that needn't be explained with unnecesary lines (sorry for my English, but I'm Italian). The mistake uses to be making the character say how he feels instead of the situation explaining itself. That's my oppinion.
Fucking awesome script. Loved it!
Unbelievable tension. Quite a quick read, too, the pages fly by. I couldn't believe when I was done.
Enjoyed the ending, I don't understand why many didn't. The ticking time bombs all created a real sense of tension that had my heart racing just reading it.
The prose-style scene descriptions were a little awkward sometimes, though. Someone else brought up the 'special number' thing from the beginning, and I thought the same thing.
Still, very tiny problems in an otherwise fantastic script. A great read!
So I think this will hardly be a movie, unless they change the end and add some live-action under the sunlight.
This script reminds me from too close of "Grave Danger", a CSI Miami 2005 episode [45'] where Agent Nick Stokes is buried in a plexiglass grave. But in the episode the standing up CSIs had the parallel rescue squad / investigation going on under the bright sunlight.
One note. Fire burns oxygen very quickly. I don't think Paul would ever had made it to the end if there wasn't a supplementary air source -- there was in CSI Miami episode, by the way, [which also had the red ants, thanks to which Agent Stokes' burial site is identified and he is finally saved, and there also was a camera in the coffin, which sent the spooked features of the man to his colleagues.]
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Well, there was the hole in which the sand was coming in, so, that may have allowed some oxygen to flow in. Not a lot, still more than he is using, but, still some oxygen.
That's all I can come up with though.
I'm sure the director will solve some of the tiny problems the script has. The point of view of a new brain in will improve things (I've seen THE CONTESTANT and I'm sure this is what's going to happen).
holyshit.
thanks for the link.
Great script.
A really ballsy director would delete the FADE TOs (pp. 18, 49, 79), rehearse for two weeks, and shoot the film in one take.
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