Premise: (revealed in the review)
About: Original draft written by hotshot Kurt Wimmer. Current draft written by screenwriting God Frank Darabont. This project made headlines late last year when Darabont dropped out of directing duties. I'd tell you who replaced him and who's starring in it, but I don't want to taint your reading experience with big Hollywood faces. If you just have to know, go to IMDB. But I'd recommend jumping in the pool naked.
Writer: Frank Darabont
It's about time. It's about fucking time. I've been yearning for a script I could wholeheartedly endorse for weeks now. Sure I've given a few "impressive" reviews along the way but nothing where I could stand up and demand my readers sit down...and then read! In comes the late 2008 headline grabbing Law-Abiding Citizen. One hell of a script.
Now I'm going to give you some advice. As is the case with most scripts I enjoy, I knew nothing about this one going in. And the twists and turns are so fun that I'm going to advise you do the same. Go down, grab it, read it. Come back and read the review.
Clyde, a loving husband, comes home one day to find both his wife and 10 year old daughter murdered. Nick, the District Attorney assigned to the case, learns that while two men were at the scene, it's unclear which one did the murdering. So when one of the men agrees to testify against the other, sending one murderer to jail and another to freedom, Nick essentially makes a deal with the devil. Clyde, the poor husband and father, begs Nick to take the case to trial and get both men indicted. But Nick doesn't want to go through the trouble. A deal is so much easier. Here is Nick and his team discussing why it would be a bad idea (in a nice little example of invisible exposition to boot):
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Nick glances back at Sarah.
NICK
What do you think?
REYNOLDS
What are you asking her for? She's just an intern.
SARAH
(deer in the headlights)
I am just an intern.
NICK
You were top of your class at Yale, don't give me that shit.
CANTRELL
Young lady. Someday you might have our jobs. You know the issues of the case before the court. Speak.
SARAH
Okay. Um. You can take both men to trial, spend a year and millions of taxpayer dollars, and probably lose. Or you can cut a deal and at least put one of the men who did the crime on death row. It's a no-brainer. You make the deal.
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And therein lies the issue of Law-Abiding Citizen. The justice system is just that: a system. And any system can be manipulated as long as someone has enough money, information, or power. The problem is, the system just screwed over the wrong man. As Clyde watches one of the men who killed his family shake Nick's hand and thank him for the "deal" that set him free, there's a moment where Nick catches Clyde staring at him. It's a chilling moment. And it's a look that tells us...this isn't over.
Cut to 10 years later where we're about to witness the first killer's execution via lethal injection. Now since this is Darabont, you know this isn't going to be your average execution (anybody see Green Mile?). But nothing can prepare you for the horrid gruesome way in which the murderer is killed. When the chemicals are injected, we can see immediately that something is wrong. His body starts smoking. He screams in pain. His skin turns black. His veins burst. The chemicals in his body are so toxic, men can't even go in the room without being poisoned.
Meanwhile, the second murderer, the free one, only wishes he could've died that easily. In a great scene with an unexpected twist, he's kidnapped and hauled back to an abaondoned barn. There Clyde, using as many drugs as possible to keep him alive, proceeds to tear apart his body piece by piece. The man is awake during the whole process, forced to watch as he's chopped to pieces.
So does Clyde try and hide the death? No. He actually videotapes it and sends a DVD of the killing directly to Nick's house.
In one of Citizen's many great scenes, Nick brings Clyde in for an interrogation. The awesome thing about the scene is that Nick knows Clyde is guilty. Clyde knows he's guilty. And Clyde knows that Nick knows he's guilty. So this should be a pretty straight-forward conversation, right?
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Nick and Dunnigan prepare to go in. Dunnigan takes off his gun and holster, lays them on a table, as Garza activates the VIDEO. Cantrell finds a chair by feel, sits down, as - Nick and Dunnigan enter. Dunnigan melts into a corner to observe as Nick sits across the table from Clyde.
CLYDE
Counselor.
NICK
Mr. Clyde.
CLYDE
Why so formal? We go way back. Call me Benson. Or Ben.
Nick sits across the table from Clyde, settles in.
NICK
Well. I'm here. So?
CLYDE
So. Maybe you can explain what this is all about.
Nick almost laughs -- not what he expected to hear.
NICK
I think that's obvious.
Clyde spreads his hands questioningly -- not really.
DUNNIGAN
You murdered two people. Rupert Ames and Clarence Darby.
CLYDE
(shifts his gaze)
Detective...?
DUNNIGAN
Dunnigan.
CLYDE
Dunnigan. I thought I'd made it clear I would only speak to the gentleman across the table from me. Dunnigan glowers at him, looks to Nick.
NICK
You murdered two people. Rupert Ames and Clarence Darby.
CLYDE
Darby? I knew about Ames, of course. I've been following the news about his horribly botched execution. But Darby too? Quite a coincidence.
DUNNIGAN
Cut the shit. We know you did it. Save everybody a lot of time and trouble and just confess.
CLYDE
Are you going to continue to insist on being part of this conversation?
DUNNIGAN
Yes.
CLYDE
(beat, gives in)
Fine. Far be it from me to be rude.
NICK
Clarence Darby was found on your property. Old abandoned shed?
CLYDE
I didn't know I had one. It's 150 acres, uncultivated. The other day I found a creek I never knew I had. Hunters trespass all the time. You going to try to pin the dead deer on me too?
-Observation Area-
SARAH
I don't believe this guy.
CANTRELL
That man is frosty.
- Inner Room -
CLYDE
It occurs to me that an even moderately clever person could try to frame me for the murder simply by killing him on my property. One of Darby's drug rivals? That's an unsavory world.
(off Nick's stare)
A jury would have to weigh that possibility. What else you got?
NICK
(temper flaring)
How about video of you dismembering Darby while he was still alive?
CLYDE
That's odd. See, if I were to do such a thing, I'd probably wear something so I couldn't be identified. Some kind of mask maybe. But you say it's actually me on the video? Did the camera capture my good side?
Nick snaps, lunges across the table, grabs Clyde.
NICK
You sick fuck, you sent it to my house! My daughter saw that video! It fucking traumatized her! She couldn't stop sobbing!
Dunnigan moves in fast, trying to pull Nick off (but failing)-
DUNNIGAN
Whoa-whoa, Nick, ease off!
CLYDE
No trouble here, Detective, we're fine. Thank you, though.
Dunnigan backs off. Clyde turns back to Nick, who's still got him in his grasp, their faces close.
CLYDE
Your daughter is, what, ten now? That's a wonderful age. My daughter was always so busy at that age, so interested, so into everything. Jumping around. I called her "Bean," she jumped around so much.
Nick is easing off by inches, subtly and ineffably weirded out, unable to break Clyde's gaze.
Softly-
CLYDE
I am sorry, Nick, that your daughter experienced that. You're right. That video should not have arrived that way. The person who sent it should have thought twice.
Dunnigan moves in again, gently but firmly pulls Nick away.
DUNNIGAN
Okay, enough.
CLYDE
Unless there's hard evidence tying me to these crimes -- forensic or otherwise -- why am I here? Why are we having this conversation?
NICK
We know you did it.
CLYDE
It's not about what you know. It's about what you can prove in court.
(off Nick's look)
Your words. Like when you called it a justice *system*. You know the thing about a system, Nick? Any system can be played.
NICK
You think you can play us? You gonna take me on?
CLYDE
Clarence Darby did. And I'm much smarter than he was. Or you.
Nick advances, furious, held back by Dunnigan:
NICK
I'm gonna bury you, fucker!
CLYDE
(lunges to his feet)
That's it, that's what I want! That fire in the belly! That's what I wanted ten years ago! Do it, Nick! Bury me!
DUNNIGAN
(shouting at Clyde)
Sit down! Sit the fuck down!
Clyde does, settles in, speaking calmly -
CLYDE
Or. Set me free.
NICK
What?
CLYDE
Did I stutter? Make your case. Or. Shake my hand on the courthouse steps and send me on my way.
(off Nick's look)
I'll even make it easy on you. I will confess, how's that?
NICK
You're gonna confess.
CLYDE
Let's start tomorrow after a good night's sleep. We'll all be fresh and rested.
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And this is where the story of Law-Abiding Citizen finally takes shape. Clyde is determined to make the system work for him, just like it worked for the men who killed his family.
It's a great premise because we've all thought it before. Our justice system is a joke. An officer can forget to read someone his Miranda Rights and a murderer is back on the streets within days. What if someone angry enough, someone with the capability and know-how, someone with the resources, decided to exploit this joke of a system for what it was? And what if he was willing to go to any lengths to do it? That is the premise of Law-Abiding Citizen.
I have a feeling this description is going to come back to bite me but I see this as sort of a hyper modern-day version of Silence Of The Lambs. The similarities are limited in most respects, but the memorable bad guy pulling the strings and manipulating the system really brought me back to that initial feeling of watching Silence Of The Lambs.
The only reason this doesn't get genius status and a higher place on my Top 25 is because of the ending. And it's not that I didn't like the ending. I did. But the last 15 pages were the only time in the script - regardless of how absurd it got- where I was actively wondering if what was happening was possible. When we find out Clyde is sneaking out of the jail to perform some of these murders............eh, I don't know. This is a man who's killed dozens of people. Wouldn't you have a couple of guards down by his cell watching him at all times? Or at the very least a camera? Incidentally, you only end up noticing this because the rest of the script is so damn good.
If done right, this has the potential for greatness.
[ ] trash
[ ] barely kept my interest
[ ] worth the read
[x] impressive (near genius)
[ ] genius
What I learned: There's no real traditional Act 1 turn in Law-Abiding Citizen. A series of really interesting twists and turns keep happening, but the true nature of the plot doesn't reveal itself until around page 45. This is just a reminder that the 30 page point is a rough placemarker for when the plot is supposed to kick in. But if you can keep a series of mysteries going, the readers will be more forgiving and allow you to take more time to begin your story.
postscript: So, if you went to IMDB you saw that the movie is now being directed by F. Gary Gray, and stars Gerard Butler and Jaime Foxx. I'm not sure I like the casting here. I would've rather seen someone like Patrick Wilson in the Nick roll and a young John Malkovich type in the roll of Clyde. But hopefully these guys pull it off. I know I'm rooting for them.